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Prophetess Elènie Damance

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So this is how this whole story of Dark Lord and epic Questing Party to defeat him started: with a prophecy as is proper...
— Isabelle


Isabelle is a young French woman who was brought through a magical portal to Sérannie, hit with translation magic, and told to help the Séranniens beat their Dark Lord. Only, once the questing party triumphed, she was forced back to the normal world. She is rather bitter about that.
  While looking for a way to go back, she writes journal entries about her time in Sérannie to not forget what happened and to prepare for her return, illustrating her notebook by sticking postits with emojis scribbles, drawing, or printing photos.


Prophecy magic

So, in Sérannie they have what they call prophecy magic. Prophecy isn't exactly the best translation though, as they don't truly see the future but the present. The way it works, the prophets need to do a ritual to get into a specific mindset. When I asked for more details, Jérine only looked haughty and said this was "classified information"—I'm pretty sure that snob just didn't want to admit she didn't know either and that it's a prophet's secret.
All the public knows is that some herbs and mushrooms whose name I forgot are involved.
Once the prophets are fully relaxed and in the right mindset, they connect to the flows of magic that fill Sérannie like an ocean. Basically, everyone lives in this mystical water,
and every action we take, every thought we have affect the magical currents and create imperceptible ripples.
Directly reading and interpreting these is impossible. What the prophets do is let this unimaginable quantity of information travel through their brain while they are in this altered mindset.
Once they awaken, they do not have truly gained any new knowledge. At least not consciously.  
In order to access it, they need to perform another piece of magic. By this second phase, they are still under the effect of the ritual and of the drugs they have taken, however the magic now manifests differently. They start by meditating for a few minutes to an hour—don't know why, to get in the right mood, I guess?
Once they are ready, they take up their preferred musical instrument and improvise a song, letting themselves be guided by their magic. What comes out is some very twisted and cryptic kind of story or prophecy based on all the information they have learned. And the fun part comes with trying to interpret all of that.

The music

Prophecy songs can be made with any style of music or instrument, so long as the prophets can sing at the same time. However, most prophets' music can be sorted in one of five styles, as taught by the five major prophet schools. The one I'm familiar with is the one from the capital.
In this style, prophets use a faniol, Séranniens' favourite musical instrument. It's a mix between a harp and a lyre that's held on the player's knees, is attached to their torso by a strap, and reaches about the top of their head. Most of them are crafted in heavily ornamented wood. Apparently, different types of woods subtly affect the sound they make, but I've never really heard a difference.
The players use their two hands to pluck something like 30-50 cords.  
While the prophets play their faniol, they declaim a poem in a mixture between a kind of sing-song tone and a proper song emphasising clear, bell-like tones in their voices. It does sound quite pretty—though since you're so focus on not missing any word, you can't really take the time to enjoy it.
While rhyming is not really necessary, all prophets are rivalling with each other for status, and having great catchy lyrics and tunes really helps to get remembered.

Social impact

Having an inkling of what your enemies or business partners think and what actions they're likely to take based on that is absolutely invaluable. This makes prophets highly respected, with the best ones living in luxury in the king's court. Most senators and rich citizens also have one or two prophets in their services—I've heard it's great as a status-symbol.
Less talented prophets live in temples, where their skills are put at the disposal of regular citizens in exchange for offerings.
Prophets are required to attune to the people they wish to target in their prophecies. They do so best by living around them and interacting with them regularly. If the prophets work in a temple rather than a court, they do so by having a discussion with the individuals petitioning them. The goal is not so much to learn all the person's secrets as to get a feel for them and their personalities. And of course, powerful mages have magical protections that limit the information prophets can find about them without their permission.


The most famous prophet is Elènie Damance, as she's had an enormous impact on the kingdom that will be felt for the rest of the century at a minimum. There are lots of stories circulating about her, but I know the truth
—the royal children and mages in our Questing Party had to bring Romain and I in their confidence to explain why her prophecies were far superior to everyone's else and why we could not just go and ask the other prophets we were coming across for help.

Prophetess Elènie Danance by AmélieIs with Artbreeder


All mages, no matter their speciality, need to be taught magic at an extremely young age. That's because adults' brains have lost their flexibility and can't truly learn to get as easily into the proper mindset—and don't I know it!
Prophecy magic is no exception to this, and so young children from prophet families are sent at 3-5 years old to one of the 5 boarding schools teaching this magic.
The Damance family has produced several major prophets in its last few generations, and most family members enjoy the patronage of moderately rich citizens. Thus, there was never any question of not sending young Elènie to the prophet school in the capital.
The environment in those schools is extremely studious and strict, for all that the future prophets are also pampered. There, Elènie learned how to play several instruments, sing, and compose music. She was also taught history and languages to have all the tools necessary to make sense of the information brought by the prophecy magic. And she was given the manners and skills required to live among high society.
Prophetess Elènie Damance playing her faniol


Prophets truly start their career during their teenage years at school. The different exhibitions and festivals they have to participate in are followed with attention by the public—everyone wants to spot talents as early as possible and snatch them away for their private court.
Even as a child, Elènie was already extremely ambitious and self-serving.
She's always known she was better than everyone else, and she was impatient with having to show respect to elders who were not half as talented as she was and with being forced to stay with those of her own age group—I can certainly sympathise!
This made her hungry to prove herself as quickly as possible so as to get her "proper" status recognised.  
In order to accelerate the usual timeline, Elènie decided to awe everyone with her talents and make absolutely sure that there was no question about her being better.
She did so by using some more than borderline methods to enhance the quality of her prophecy: the blood of her prophecy targets.
She developed a trick to obtain people's blood: offering them a drink from a cup decorated with sharp edges that were sure to prick the unwaries. Having access to their blood once was enough to hone in on them and enhance her prophecies.
Elènie's plan was highly successful, and she was brought directly to the king as a mere teenager, becoming the younger appointed royal prophet. Of course, the king and the royal mages are not stupid, and they immediately knew what she was doing—or at least they pretended to once they discovered it.
They just did not care. The quality of her prophecies was too good to not take advantage of them.

Most famous work


Shocking revelations

Thanks to her amazing skills, not only in prophesying but also in composing music and improvising catchy lyrics, Elènie quickly became the darling of the royal court. However, what guaranteed her national fame was one particular prophecy that was made exceptional not thanks to her blood magic tricks but rather to her own skills—and whether they like her or not, everyone recognises that she had loads!
Indeed, what first made Elènie a talented prophet was her perceptiveness and her ability to hone onto targets with the slimmest of interactions with them. For this particular prophecy, Elènie managed to see through the magical protections of many powerful individuals and to unveil a deadly plot against the kingdom.
During a public prophesying, Elènie revealed the existence of a mysterious Dark Lord who was using taboo illusion magic to replace the senators one by one with his minions so as to take control of the kingdom and assassinate the king.

This revelation was absolutely shocking, as there had been no traces of a Dark Lord or treason plot at all.
People were doubtful at first, but it was proved true when minions in disguise were found among the senators. This triggered a massive panic, first in the royal court, then the entire kingdom.
And a well justified one! When you're surrounded by illusion magic, you never know who to trust and you're just filled with paranoia...
Following this, the whole prophecy was carefully analysed to find all the hints it could possibly contain and more. Nobody wants to admit it, but I got the distinct impression that more than a few people were wrongly executed based on nothing more than flimsy interpretations of a throwaway line.
Everyone is still trying to find a proof of the Dark Lord's identity, but so far nobody's had any success with that.

Invisible evil covering the land
All will happily worship his bloody hand
Malevolent hidden lord of damnation
Spreading iniquity throughout the nation   Unacceptable magic
So unthinkably tragic

The Chosen One

Besides unveiling the existence of the Dark Lord and his plot, the prophecy also told of a hero, a Chosen One, hiding somewhere in the capital, and who would be able to wield one of the mystical weapons owned by the royal family. This sword has the ability to pierce through magical wards and shields, and since nobody has been able to wield it properly in centuries, no counters have been created, making it an ideal weapon against the Dark Lord.
The king sent his royal mages to hunt for the Chosen One, and Romain was found rather easily in an orphanage of the capital thanks to the details of the prophecy, thus further enhancing Elènie's fame.
Romain, the Chosen One by AmélieIS with Artbreeder

His young nemesis slumbers in ignorance
Magic so thick but a mere pawn
Forsaken yet the only one with a chance
Wielding legendary weapon


Consequences of the revelation

Unfortunately, the prophecy did not help with capturing the Dark Lord himself. However, he was forced to change his plans and stopped his slow infiltration of the senate and nobility. Instead, he started an open warfare against the kingdom in order to kill the king and take the throne for himself.
  Despite the nobility hailing Elènie has a hero who saved them all from getting under the Dark Lord's dictatorship, I've heard all the things people have been saying behind their back. That without her, there would have been no war at all and that their family would not be dead...

The Dark Lord's army by AmélieIS

All the nobles are only ruling us because of their powers, so why would that Dark Lord be any different? Just give him a fancy title, put him in control of a region and be done with it! It's not like anyone noticed he was influencing politics anyway, so he won't be that different from all the other assholes in the North!
— A southern man refusing to help the king

Questing Party

Following the revelations, the king investigated the taboo illusion magic practised by the Dark Lord to find a counter for it. The royal archives still house some information about it from before that magic was banned, and they mentioned that people from other worlds are immune to it. This led the royal mages to study rituals to open gates between worlds and resulted in them summoning little old me to Sérannie.
Finally, the king created the Questing Party, led by his heiress Jérine, and including his son Calendre, royal mages and guards, the Chosen One Romain, and me, the otherworlder. And we were all sent on a quest to fulfil the prophecy and defeat the Dark Lord.

Magical portal between worlds by Stefan Keller on Pixabay

Questing Party

The questing party that has defeated the Dark Lord

More Prophecies

Elènie's prophecy has created a rush to get more of them related to the Dark Lord and the civil war. However, although a few prophets have been able to uncover some parts of his plots and illusions, no one has reproduced her exploit and got through the Dark Lord's protections. Not even Elènie herself—he undoubtedly reinforced his shields after the revelation.
Elènie herself was the leader of this new craze, and the king was encouraging her. She was trying to link her prophecies specifically to all the most important and powerful people of the kingdom until she got a hit on the Dark Lord.  
Unfortunately, all of this ended tragically when Elènie was assassinated at the height of the war. Some rumours of dubious quality say that the Dark Lord did it himself. That he tempted her with joining him and she refused him by loyalty to the king—hard to believe given her character.
IMO she refused to submit fully to the Dark Lord and behaved too arrogantly, and he simply didn't have the patience to deal with her.
A lesson to everyone facing him, and exactly why when I was captured, I was extremely polite and immediately pretended to submit to him. And we all know who survived in the end.

Since her tragic death, Elènie's biggest legacy has been the Dark Lord's defeat and the preservation of Sérannian freedom:

Elènie is the main character of the short story "The Prophet and the Dark Lord":

The Prophet and the Dark Lord

Cover image: Prophetess Elènie Danance by AmélieIs with Artbreeder
Character Portrait image: Prophetess Elènie Danance by AmélieIs with Artbreeder


Author's Notes

Icons from Font Awesome, RPGAwesome, and TJ's Worldbuilding Assets.   The sticky notes images are from lukpedclub on Vecteezy.

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Jan 20, 2022 17:09 by K.S. Bishoff

This was really great. I do think you should weave the beginning on technique into your character's story ... perhaps her learning the technique to give a more personal feel.

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Jan 20, 2022 18:29 by Amélie I. S. Debruyne

Thanks Dazz :D I thought about doing it the way you suggest, but to really make it work I would unfortunately need a looot more words and I'm already at the limit XD

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Jan 21, 2022 02:14 by Lilliana Casper

Love this article and how it's written! Your take on prophecy is very interesting!

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Jan 21, 2022 15:01 by Amélie I. S. Debruyne

Thanks :D That's my go to mechanism to explain divination magic. I don't like when things are set in stone and can actually be predicted XD

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Jan 21, 2022 04:16 by Bart Weergang

After I actually read what I was reading and understood this is written in a diary format the use of all the emoji's makes a lot more sense and is actually adding a of depth lot to the story. The technique part in the beginning is a bit difficult to follow, but once you start talking about Elénie it becomes clear.
To finish the article with "And we all know who survived in the end. " is gold.

Jan 21, 2022 15:00 by Amélie I. S. Debruyne

Thanks :D I used the emoji just like I did when I was writing a bullet journal XD   By the technical part I'm guessing you mean especially the "prophecy magic" bit? Yes, that would probably work better with an example in a quote. Unfortunately, I'm out of words...   Isabelle is really vindicative, isn't she? :p

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Jan 22, 2022 22:52

Great article and as always fun to read! ^^ Nice to learn something more about how the Dark Lord thing started to become known. Pretty cool way doing prophesies.   Needs more emoticons though ;)

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Jan 30, 2022 10:11 by Amélie I. S. Debruyne

Thanks!   Yes, the poor Dark Lord, his plans was going on perfectly and he was well on his way to victory when this happened :(   I've added some more emojis since then :p Hope you're satisfied! XD

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Feb 2, 2022 09:10

Oh you actually did that ? xp What have I done!   Poor dark lord though.

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Jan 27, 2022 03:03 by Diane Morrison

I love your "unreliable narrator" second-person approach to this character! Well done!

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Jan 30, 2022 10:13 by Amélie I. S. Debruyne

Thanks :D Writing in character is sometimes annoying with how limited I am in the kind of things I can share in the article, but it's also really fun to be able to react to what I'm saying :D

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Jan 27, 2022 14:50 by Adam Roberts

I love the illustrations and icons - they make this very fun to read. I also really appreciate how information and pronunciations are included when you move your mouse over a name or word.

Jan 30, 2022 10:14 by Amélie I. S. Debruyne

Thanks! It's been lots of fun adding all those emojis and drawings :D It was similar to how I was making my bullet journal when I had one, and poor Isabelle has way to much time on her hands to do all of that...

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Jan 28, 2022 18:11

Amélie, as always this article was a pleasure to read. You are an awesome writer. Having it from the viewpoint of someone else writing in a journal was interesting and fun.   Also, the way prophecy magic works is very cool. Not so much an accurate description of the future as an interpretation of the now.   Your choice of illustrations, art and formatting are always examples of what I hope to one day achieve. Keep being an awesome part of the community.

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Jan 30, 2022 13:39 by Amélie I. S. Debruyne

Thanks a lot for you comment!   Writing in character is really fun, I love being able to write any stupid reaction or comment that comes to mind about the rest of the text, and being able to play with silly emojis XD And it also give me an excuse for my bad drawing skills, as it's all because of Isabelle XD

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Jan 29, 2022 17:08 by Catoblepon

I like how the prophecy magic works! And also how Elènie was both admired for her talent but also "hated" because if it wasn't for her people wouldn't die (well, more like, people wouldn't notice that people was dying because of that). Great job!

Jan 30, 2022 13:41 by Amélie I. S. Debruyne

Thanks :D The bringer of bad news are always hated, aren't they? :( Not that Elènie left that stopped her! She really knew how to turn any situation to her advantage, a shame she miscalculated with the dark lord and thought she was in a position to negotiate for more...

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Feb 5, 2022 06:40 by Stormbril

I have to say, I really love the first person journal style on display here -- it's just so easy to read and get immersed in, it has such wonderful flow. The emojis are a really great touch too xD "They start by meditating for a few minutes to an hour—don't know why, to get in the right mood, I guess?" amazing xD     The way you took us through an introduction to the prophetesses, the way the magic works, the music, and the impact at the start was a really great introduction. Makes the following portions regarding the bard themselves really easy to understand and get into! It's fascinating to have a bard who's... "barding" is so tied to magic and prophecy. I love how skilled Elenie is and the risks she takes to prove it. Even if that high skill and confidence ends up coming back to bite her (rip) D:   She's a great character, and this is a great article :D The dialogue, art, emojis, everything really brings it together nicely.

Feb 12, 2022 14:38 by Amélie I. S. Debruyne

Thanks for the comment :D I wasn't intended at all to go that way with the prophecy magic before the challenge, but this was really an amazing inspiration! I'm also glad you like the style, I really had fun with those drawings and emojis XD

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Feb 8, 2022 09:36

Hi!   As usual for your articles, this was a great entry. I liked this use of emojis, it really made the text more dynamic and aerated. Similarly, I liked the great number of personal and credited artworks you added to the description, it made things all the easier to read. The tooltips with indications on how to pronounce nouns also was a great addition.   As for the content, that is a fairly standard dark lord prophecy, but a well-written one nonetheless. Still, whether that said dark lord is actually evil is unclear! And it has a fairly distinct approach to things, being hidden in illusions and acting through political mishaps and general paranoïa. Besides, I liked this unreliable narrator approach: they always are the best, and in this situation it even reinforced the questions one can have regarding that dark lord!   Finally, this way you describe prophecies, and how it is used to try and pierce through the Dark Lord's illusions was really nice. Almost like intelligence warfare, at this level.   Anyway, great job!

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Feb 12, 2022 14:41 by Amélie I. S. Debruyne

Thanks for the comment :D Indeed, Isabelle is a very unreliable narrator. She was in Sérannie for seven years during the Quest to defeat the Dark Lord, but she was surrounded by the king's children, royal mages and royal guards, really not the best entourage to get an objective view on what's going on!   And yes, those prophecies are an extremely useful tool to point towards enemies but also all the nobles in the kingdom and members of the court. Personal shields against them are hard to raise, and so everyone risks having their personal lives exposed at any moment :(

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Feb 9, 2022 15:29

Since her tragic death, Elènie's biggest legacy has been the Dark Lord's defeat and the preservation of Sérannian freedom. Of course the Dark Lord feared her. Coward. The Dark Lord is a coward. No honor in his dark soul...   Thanks for the read, it was a joy and I wept a little for Elènie.

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Feb 12, 2022 14:35 by Amélie I. S. Debruyne

Awww, that poor Dark Lord :p I'm glad I made you cry XD Though I'm also sad that I decided to kill Elènie and can't do more awesome stuff with her, she is a very fun character...

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Feb 9, 2022 16:31 by Angantyr

Haha! XD I love this article, from the structure to the character herself.   The introduction to who prophets are and what role they play in Sérannie read smoothly, and I was able to prepare and adorn the room for the guest to come — Elènie. It's kind of fun and amusing to read about the character from a perspective of an outsider — not only an excited and smug teenager but also an otherworlder. The emojis help with that a lot — I could get in the mood even before I read about Elènie herself. My first thought was that there were just too many of them, but while reading, I found that they served as a nice wrap up of the thought described.   The small fragments of poetry have a catchy rhythm to them. I wonder what melody you would pick?   I found the little bits of social realism amusing — people blaming her for sounding the alarm when everything could've stayed perfectly normal, as it always was. It probably wouldn't, but not that anyone would care. They would then blame her anyway for another reason, probably...   There are some differences in character names, particularly in the pronunciation of Elènie's family name and the Questing party (drawing vs the text).   Story-wise, I miss Elènie's point of view and feel she could be an intriguing and captivating character. Is it something you are leaving for the book or the short story?   Fingers crossed for making it in time. I enjoyed reading Isabelle's journal.

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Feb 12, 2022 14:54 by Amélie I. S. Debruyne

Thanks a lot for the comment :D   I didn't have a specific melody for the poetry/song, though I always end up more chanting them than properly singing (which is supposed to be what Elènie is doing).   Yes, it's always the people sharing the bad news that are blamed :( But don't worry, Elènie was not the type to let any of that bother her :p   thanks for catching the typos with the name!!! I didn't realise at all that problem with the drawing - first time I mess Calendre's name too, as this one has been the same from the start! The Damance vs Danance one is because I decided on n first, then made the mistake with m through the article and then had no choice but to do the switch XD Seems that one last n had slipped in in the variable...   And I ended up making that short story indeed! I love writing quotes from the character POV and I was very sad I couldn't do that here because it's all from Isabelle's POV, but I couldn't just pass that occasion! I choice to write about her last day at court and her meeting with the dark lord. It's so sad that it could all have gone differently if only Isabelle was not the main character instead :p

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Feb 10, 2022 07:41

Very nice! I love the approach to prophesy and the world jumping mechanic. These being Isabelle's notes is a good literary angle. I also really like the presentation, especially the Chibis pictures, they are adorable.   I see what you meant about the word limit issue that I'd described on mine, but you've managed to get a lot of information in to the article which is awesome.   Thank you for you great work!

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Feb 12, 2022 14:34 by Amélie I. S. Debruyne

Thanks for the comment :D I'm glad that you like the style of the article. It's really fun to explore different ways to do articles in different worlds or articles and I like what I'm doing here with the journal style. It's also an excuse for my bad drawings XD

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Feb 10, 2022 14:40 by George Sanders

I liked the narrator comments and faces. I didn't expect she would be part of the story in a questing party! Whoo! Glad you survived :)

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Feb 12, 2022 14:32 by Amélie I. S. Debruyne

Thanks for the comment :D Yes, Isabelle is the main character for the novel set in this world. The questing party is the background that occurred before the novel start.

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Feb 10, 2022 19:49

As others have said, the narrator, her unique emoji style and the hand drawings are the silent stars in the background - though there is also so much interesting stuff to talk about. I love how the journal style achieves such a narrative unity with those elements.   Musical prophecies seem so natural if you think about it, but I've not seen it done before, so that's a great premise. Elènie's talents in cold reading, prophecy and intrigue and her driven nature explain her success very well - though I wonder what would have been the limit on her ambition, if she wouldn't have been killed. She seems so well suited to the game of the courts that I wouldn't be surprised if she wasn't up to cloak and dagger shenanigans.   I'm left to wonder in what way Elènie or her prophecy will show up again. She has to. Right? Right?   Anyways, this was amazing to read. I was ready to subscribe at paragraph two.

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Feb 12, 2022 14:28 by Amélie I. S. Debruyne

Thank you for you comment :D   I've ended up writing a short story about Elènie because I couldn't stand not showing more about her. Such a shame I decided to kill her, she could have been the main character of a noel instead... :(   I show a bit more of Elènie's ambitions in the short story, but yes, there was no way of not getting involved in all of the schemes while living in the court. Prophets still have control of what they say during their songs, and so this is riff for manipulations about what and what not to reveal about certain persons :p However, Elènie is not from the nobility and the Sérannian society is very divided between noble and commoners, so it was likely that she would have found her way blocked before long. The Dark Lord himself was a good alternative, if only she had negotiated better with him...

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Feb 11, 2022 14:13

Your article is so epic and detailed, I love the play of present prophecy and destiny being wo en together with music and history. Just amazing.

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Feb 12, 2022 14:24 by Amélie I. S. Debruyne

Thanks :D I wasn't intending to use music for the prophecy before this challenge, but it really ended up inspiring me and I love the idea now :D

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Feb 12, 2022 13:19

I found the emojis distracting, and though it made it hard to enjoy the text in between them. I see that others have liked it though, so this is just another opinion heh

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Feb 12, 2022 14:43 by Amélie I. S. Debruyne

No problem, I understand that it's not a style working for everyone. Thanks for stopping by to comment anyway!

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Feb 12, 2022 18:43 by Paul Fijma

Nice and well worked out article. Interesting way to have the future influencing the now without making the end result a fact. The hand drawn art makes it much more personal :-) Did she perhaps / maybe somehow predict her own demise ? the assassination? (without recognising her own person as victim?)

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Feb 12, 2022 19:22 by Amélie I. S. Debruyne

Thanks for the comment! :D She predicted her own death, both because she was a bit too arrogant to consider that possibility, but mostly because the Dark Lord's protections against prophecy magic makes it extremely difficult to predict anything linked to him in any way.

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Feb 12, 2022 20:27

This was really cool I like the Roman / maybe Grecian? influences mixed with fantasy! I love how feisty and kind of cut throat she is. Sad she passed away but she kind of achieved what she always wanted, leaving behind such a grand legacy like that! Also who is this Dark lord? lol

Feb 18, 2022 09:37 by Amélie I. S. Debruyne

Thanks :D Yes the world is strongly inspired by Roman culture, although I've also realised I added a few things from the revolutionary period of France when I wasn't paying attention XD Yes, poor Elènie... I ended up liking her a lot more than I expected and now I'm sad too I killed her :( As for the Dark Lord, I'm going to keep everything mysterious on WA since his identity is part of the plot of the novel :p

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Feb 15, 2022 12:13 by Dr Emily Vair-Turnbull

I really enjoyed the journal style of this article and all the sticky notes and emojis. Elènie sounds like a fascinating character, though not necessarily a nice one. I like that about her, though. :)   Great job!

Feb 18, 2022 09:39 by Amélie I. S. Debruyne

Thanks Emy :D Yes, I love Elènie, and now I'm almost regretting she is not the MC! Cut-throat characters are just so nice to write XD

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Feb 16, 2022 22:11 by Secere Laetes

I really have to say that for me the best thing about the article is Isabelle, or rather her way of telling it. Especially at the end, this "and then I did it right and I'm still alive. Ha!" That was so good that I had to show it to my husband and he also thought it was great.   Apart from that, I find it vividly described how the divination magic works there - and how much show is involved. It's a good system that is a bit different from the usual. So it makes perfect sense that they are sent to school so early.   What I also find very successful about the article is that you have concluded the story (also through the add-ons) through the writing style and the examples in such a way that first of all no further questions remain open (and the story also reveals that Isabelle was right ^^). Especially when there is a lot of story to tell, this rarely works. - And the idea with the post-it is really very original. Thanks for the article.

Feb 18, 2022 09:56 by Amélie I. S. Debruyne

Thanks a lot :D Isabelle is very fun to write too :p   I really wasn't planning to do anything with music for the prophecy magic, but this challenge really ended up inspiring me, and I also love the result :D

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Feb 17, 2022 12:14

I realy enjoyed this artical and how you used prophecy I look foward to reading more. I also liked how you showed the consequences.

Feb 18, 2022 09:51 by Amélie I. S. Debruyne

Thanks :D I don't like people being able to truly see the future, so I had to come up with an explanation of how it could all work XD

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Feb 18, 2022 10:46 by Tara Fae Belle

Love the journal feel to it, with the sticky notes (how can I not love them?) and the sketches too! It was interesting reading about one character from another characters perspective (as an article) but it worked really well XD

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Feb 19, 2022 15:55 by Amélie I. S. Debruyne

Thanks :D Yes, everything is from Isabelle's perspective so I was limite by what information she had access to but I still managed to communicate what I wanted :D

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Feb 19, 2022 08:27

Lovely article with interesting story. I love the explanation of how the prophecy magic works as I always love to find out how these sorts of things are thought to work as it is very intriguing. The explanation here feels very sound and logical, and I also love the fact that there is no actual seeing to the future involved but making predictions of the future on the base of the current state. The interesting question that raises is how the making of the prophecies affects one’s mind as I could imagine that the ritual might not be good to one’s mental health. The description of Elènie does not give lot of insight to that as I feel like the description could fit to child prodigy of any field.   I also love the notion of how the common people feel about the war as it nicely underlines the fact that the poor people are the ones who often suffer when the powerful fight. It also makes me to question that perhaps the good and evil is not so obvious in here as the name Dark Lord implies. The narrator’s comments also give a nice tone to the article and somehow gives more information than just a business-like article of the same subject.   The article also looks very beautiful. I like the pencil drawings added to the article as they feel like the narrator had drawn them themselves. Especially the small drawn self-portraits (?) showing emotions were precious. The small icons inside the text were however bit distracting as they interrupted my flow of reading and thus made the reading lot slower as I need to have focus when reading. I still greatly appreciate the effort you have gone through to place them there and the style you have wanted to achieve with them as they are clearly well thought out and placed with care.   Overall, very beautiful article with thought-provoking story. Great job and sorry about the lengthy comment.

Feb 19, 2022 16:22 by Amélie I. S. Debruyne

Thanks a lot for the comment :D And no problem about the length, feedback is always appreciated :D   Thanks for pointing out some of the icons were a bit distracting. You're not the only one to have said so so I've deleted a few of them, especially when they were in the middle of paragraphs. It's still a new style I'm experimenting with so I'll know to be more careful next time :p   Regarding how the magic affect the prophet's mind, I have all the magic in this world requiring specific mindset and focus that needs to be learn in childhood, including prophecy magic. In addition to using the plasticity of children's brain, they also use some potions with neurological properties. Those are slightly toxic and so they have strict limits in how much can be taken in what time period, and healing magic is also used to help. I haven't thought about those magics having long term effect on people's character and mind, but that's an interesting idea.   I won't comment much in the dark lord and the politics since those are important plot point, but I'm glad the ambiguity come across XD   Yes, the drawing are supposed to all have been made by Isabelle, and the small ones are indeed self portraits :D.   Thanks again for the long comment :D

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Feb 19, 2022 11:35

Great article, I really loved the diary format. I will definitely stick around longer to learn some more about this interesting world.

Feb 19, 2022 15:54 by Amélie I. S. Debruyne

Thanks, glad you like it :D

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