Chiseno

And the doors of Hino shall open and on a road of blood the legions will ride, in the fire of cleansing war, with the rage of war lust in their unbeating heart and Chiseno shall be their general.
  Chiseno, Divine of War and Bloodlust, he who is the gore of battle and the sword of Drewel. The child of Drewel, and one of the gods of the Mirror Court, Chiseno is infamous, respected, and yet despised by mortals and immortals alike. He is father of the realm of Hino, and the creator of its famed legions that shall ride to war when time ends.   His symbols are a bleeding horse and a blood dripping man, and among mortals he is also worshiped as Hinoseno.  

Birth

Chiseno was Drewel's greatest creation when she split her soul and shaped her children. He was born of her fear, and rose to be his mother's champion, defender of her court, and her closest confidant.   Frugi was enraged when she discovered his creation, and she tried to cast down Chiseno, and was beaten back by his elder brother Melikad. From then on Chiseno grew in hiding, like a tumour, and for millennia Frugi searched the cosmos for him, fearful of what he represented. Fearful of Drewel's power eclipsing her own.   He emerged a grown god after eons, powerful, with a legion at this command. Fearful of Frugi's tryanny Ramio had given to him a portion of the souls of man for a single year, and Chiseno took the greatest warriors who fell, and with them he fashioned a legion of power. He trained them in the most brutal arts and flame magic and equipped them with armor fashioned from the scales of a great serpent.   When the Blood Fire, Frugi's foolish creation, ravaged the heavens it was Chiseno who led the forces that assailed Frugi's realm and destroyed her monstrous jewel. From then, Chiseno took his place among the Divine, and Frugi - her realm lost and her power quelled for a time - reluctantly accepted him into their number.  

Worship

Chiseno is worshiped by warriors across the world. He is the patron of the sixth house of Morioka, and the soldiers of many nations give prayer to him for blessing in the battle ahead. His rare favour is the rage of a berserker, forgetting pain and consequence, only knowing destruction and victory. The legendary Smoke Warriors are favoured particularly for this blessing, and though they also give prayer to other gods Chiseno is their most important.  
Sacrifice to Chiseno is the only method by which one can surely obtain his attention. Blood is his passion, the warm fervor of life that calls to him. Only life taken will count you as a true supplicant of Chiseno, and for this reason summoning the god is tricky and perhaps ill advised. Spill the blood of an enemy upon a stone, and call for him, and he may come.
 

Realm

Hino was fashioned in the ages since Chiseno joined the pantheon of Divine. It is the realm of blood given form. War, lust and avarice of all kind are fostered and brutality is encouraged. Death is but temporary here, for the souls who die in Chiseno are not given an escape to reincarnation. To tempt fate by visiting this ill realm is unwise, for few escape. The worthy might become infernal soldiers, and the unworthy nothing but entertainment.   The realm abuts that of his sister Aghme, where punishment is meted out, at times with the assistance of Chiseno's legion.


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1 Dec, 2018 11:24

It's a well-written and fascinating article, but there feels like I'm missing a lot of the significance of some of the names and some of the events without really digging into the creation mythology.   Maybe it would be a good idea to add some short excerpts and links to relevant myths along the sidebar?   How often does he bestow his favor on mortals? Do gods in your setting draw their power from the worship or sacrifice that they get, or are they intrinsically powerful? Is there any mortal misconceptions about the rites and rituals that they do? Like believing something pleases the god but he doesn't actually care?   Awesome stuff! Keep it up!! :D

2 Dec, 2018 01:09

Hi Qurilion! Really appreciated your feedback. I should've linked more heavily, so that the auto-tooltips would be there. I also needed to link a lot of the unmade stuff. Thank you for pointing that out.   I'm unsure how to present the base info on Divine without having to repeat the same info over and over. So what I've done is update the sidebar with relevant articles and some quick references. Do you think that looks better and is easier to understand?

2 Dec, 2018 20:07

Instead of using blocks, I like to have a short of recap and a link to the relevant. There's some repetition, but don't think of it ( and write it ) like a hook to make the reader curious to go there and read more, while giving them the very basics they need to know to get this article. :) Hopefully that helps :D

1 Dec, 2018 17:08

It is written in a very fitting tone, I'm enjoyed reading it! Though sometimes I was ripped back out from the universe you've created because there wasn't enough explanation about some of the names mentioned under "birth". It would be a good idea if you either added tooltips or made small articles to explain them. Another idea could be a word list with explanations in the sidebar :D

2 Dec, 2018 01:10

Thank you Ninnel. I hope I improved that with my addition of new links and the Mentioned Here section on the sidebar. If that works well I will use that on all my deity articles.

2 Dec, 2018 10:30

Very nice addition, gave it another read and I definetly understood more this time :D (Also, it's just Ninne the next thing is just 124 :3)

1 Dec, 2018 23:57

Really cohesive! Here are some of my favourite parts:   "Chiseno was Drewel's greatest creation when she split her soul and shaped her children. He was born of her fear, and rose to be his mother's champion, defender of her court, and her closest confidant. " I love the juxtaposition you create here, between something as unconscionable as blood magic and as pure as a mother's love (in the way that manifests here).   "Sacrifice to Chiseno is the only method by which one can surely obtain his attention. Blood is his passion, the warm fervor of life that calls to him." I like how intuitive this feels. This detail fits so fluidly with your character, and you describe it in (if it were possible) relatable terms.   The greatest challenge to me in reading this article was how heavily it alludes to other details in your world that I am unfamiliar with. I had to read your article through twice in order to feel that I had enough of a handle of your subject amid all those references, since I'm not familiar with your world overall. I agree with the other comments that sidebar links would be helpful.   To give you something else to chew on, since your other feedback echoed mine, what (other than blood and perhaps worship) does Chiseno long for? I'd love to see a bit of humanizing complexity.

2 Dec, 2018 01:11

Thank you Considerthelilies!   I'm really glad you enjoyed the article, and knowing which parts really resonated with you is a big help.   I apologise for the over-referencing of outside points. I've added some sidebar links, so hopefully that helps.   Hmm . . . . I should consider that final point. I haven't even thought about relationships, if he has a lover, who his friends would be. He is disliked by many Divine but not all I imagine . . . Good thinking point.

2 Dec, 2018 02:45

I like how this is written, and it's very interesting to see somebody else's mythology. I do have a small issue though: when you say his symbol is a "blood dripping man," that conjures images of a puddle of red liquid oozing out humans. Other than that, nice job!

2 Dec, 2018 03:34

That is the imagery I was going for actually. A bit icky, I know. Thanks for the feedback.