Lights of the Wilde
The Wilde is the name of the unexplored caves of the
Guild Stratum. The Wilde is dangerous and many lives are lost to it. The further you get away from the city, it becomes far less likely of coming back. The maze of caves becomes too difficult to navigate back.
Selvin Korithia
Selvin was a father and lost his daughter to the Dancing Lights. He decided he would keep his last child safe in the only way he could. He told his son the story of the Dancing Lights. The story detailed a plan by demons to lure children away and take their souls. It was a simple story, but effective in keeping his son away. The story moved around the Cavern and slowly became a common story told to children to prevent them from wandering away into the Wilde.
First thing I noticed? NICE color choice for your CSS here!
"The story detailed a plan by demons..." would get your point across better, I think— as it is I had to reread the line a number of times to figure out what you were trying to say.Small formatting nitpick— in your opening quote you have a line break after "The Children went Away" which starts the second half of the story one line downwards— offset.
I do like the story, besides that!
I do like the idea here a good bit, this light, dusty ore that light dances off of— luring children. What a perfect thing to twist into a frightening tale to keep them away!
A nice article, all said and done— just a few minor grammar mistakes (I elected not to point them all out as some can be annoyed by that), I don't have questions to ask— as you've explained everything here fairly well!
I'm fine with grammar corrections, it's one of my great weaknesses. :) I had the break in there because when I looked at it on mobile it merged them together...but I assume most will look at it on a pc...so I'll remove the break. Thanks.