Mouse followed the outcasts. The man, Mark, refused to look at her. He stared into the darkness before them, deep in though. The woman, Mary, didn't seem too keen on talking either. Mouse couldn't blame them. They were about to bring an enemy into their home. The same revelation made Mouse wonder why she followed in the first place.
They didn't take her gun, which was a good sign, but the way they whispered and exchanged looks made Mouse uneasy.
The further they walked, the more Mouse struggled. She felt lightheaded, covered in sweat despite the cold. She was breathing fast, and her HUD displayed a rapid drop in blood pressure.
Mark turned around, taking note of her rapid breathing, "are you good?"
Mouse shook her head, "I think I'm septic."
He didn't seem surprised. "I figured. We're almost there."
Soon after, they emerged from a wide rocky opening into a large cavern. Metal shacks adorned the walls, the ground, and some were hanging from cables attached to the roof with bridges linking them to the ground below.
The small village was lit by torch and bioluminescent fungi, a massive bonfire burning at its center.
Mouse looked to distance and saw fields of dirt and compost. Men and women rode on the backs of massive canine beasts, a plow pulled behind them. They weren't just surviving down here, they were thriving.
They stopped in front of a large shack. It was neater than the others, more put together. Every piece seemed made to fit.
They entered and Mouse saw the closest thing to a clinic the outcasts had. Various tools littered shimmering metal trays. Nestled in another room behind a pane of glass was what served as an operation table. Several empty beds lined the walls, the sheets and blankets folded and cleaned despite the stains accumulated over the years.
She felt a pinch, the poke of a syringe. Mark removed it before she could react. He pointed to the operating table. "You can walk, or I can carry you. That arm has to go, and you know it."
Archivist's note: I am rarely wrong. As
The Archivist of Safeharbor, making an error can get people killed. This is yet another burden I must bear alone, for I have spread much misinformation concerning our kin in the depths below.
When Mouse found her way to the surface, she brought undeniable truth. Video, voice recordings, and detailed records written in her own hand.
I feel it fitting to keep these records in their original form, an attempt to retain their truth. As a primary source, rest assured that this entry in the archives is as valid as my own.
On Outcasts
A report by Rhey "Mouse" Thakur
These records are meant to be an amendment to existing data and preconceptions on the outcasts, their culture, and their place in the natural order of Safeharbor. I can't really say much beyond what I experienced, but I saw enough to know that our records are hilariously wrong.
Some outcasts are as we feared, both tribal and malicious forces thwarting our efforts to explore the depths. They attack out of spite and hatred, rather than survival, and to protect their way of life.
The worst of the outcasts linger on the surface. The deeper you go, the less you see. Most have moved on, no longer concerned about their exile. They aren't resentful of us. They're terrified of us.
Love the structure of this and your other recent articles - moving from narrative to report and back again. It really helps immersion. AND ratchets up the tension with Mouse finding her Dad, and losing an arm. Is there a narrative order to the articles you're writing?
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Thanks so much. I really enjoy playing around with it. That's actually a great question. yes absolutely. You can check the narrative order in full by clicking the box on the left side of the page. I try to keep the linear nav updated. at the bottom of each article should be the previous and next article in order (provided I've written the next) thanks so much for the kinds words!