Home in The Void Between | World Anvil


Here it is! The season finale. I hope it was worth the wait. I really want to thank all of you for reading and offering your feedback. Now all that's left is to go back, do some editing, and finish adapting it for the podcast. Soon the wait shall be over!
Invicta's first mate spoke through the mic in her helmet, "Captain, get out. The enemy vessel is boarding as we speak. We have a shuttle on the way."   "No," she replied. Her rifle was aimed down the long corridor, her back to the airlock. The station was filled with green gas by now, wisping and swirling in the air. "They keep showing up. We've been running for too long. With all the sacrifices we've made, it's time to see some results. I'm not leaving till I kill one."   She heard an echo, a metallic bang that shot through the entire station. She tried to control her breathing. Gibraltar exited her suit, a black mass of tendrils rolling down her arm and perching itself on one of the canisters she used for cover.   The lights of the station dimmed, and flickered. Within moments, she saw it. It was faint, something barely noticeable, even to her trained eyes. She saw movement in the gas. What once flowed with perfect unpredictable motion, now gently danced to a different tune.   The fog drifted to the side, seemingly without reason. It was the only warning she'd get. On impulse, she aimed and fired. She heard the round connect, heard something drop to the floor, and then watched for the next sign of motion.   Another came, then another. She fired, but there were too many to shoot in such a short amount of time. She heard a whisper, a hiss in her ear that spoke, yet said nothing.   Gibraltar leaped from the canister, wrapped its tendrils firmly around the target's head, and tightened its grip as the sound of bent metal and cracking glass filled the corridor. Whatever Gibraltar attacked fell to the ground as Invicta continued to fire.   Invicta heard the whispers again, this time on both sides. She jumped up, Gibraltar returning to the breach in her suit. When she turned to run away, she stopped mid stride. The hole in her suit was open for too long. It gave them a way in.   "No." She said. She wasn't on the station anymore. She was standing on a street of solid gold paved in a field of dense white clouds. The metal hull was gone, replaced with a light blue sky.   Invicta spun around, her bare skin bathed in golden light. She felt the warmth and looked down to find the verdant hue of her skin was gone. She wore a white dress that flowed in the gentle breeze. She saw the source of the light, a pearly gate not far from where she stood.   "Not here," she whispered. She felt the urge to run, to escape this place and seek shelter. She shouted, slamming her eyes shut, "Get out of my head."   When she opened her eyes she saw them, a multitude of humanoid shapes standing in a circle around her. They had no faces, but she could tell they were smiling. Their thin, sleek bodies were colored black as night. The vision neared its end as one of them stepped forward. The streets of gold and white clouds faded back to the metal hull of the station.   She heard an alarm in the distance, growing louder as she drifted back to reality. She heard large metal doors opening behind her. The figure in front of her kicked her in the chest. She felt herself floating, the blue sky fading into an endless field of stars.   She didn't panic when she realized her fate. They kicked her out of the airlock. She watched the station get smaller and smaller as she tumbled through space. She couldn't tell which way was up.   Gibraltar maintained the seal on her suit as it forced more of its body out into the void. It released the slightest puff of the chlorine gas from within, an attempt to stop the spinning.     When she stopped moving, she could see the station clearly. A massive black ship hovered over it. The ship was angled, jagged, as if it were a knife ready to cleave through anything that stood in its way.   Tethers slithered from its frame and anchored the vessel to the station. It was their idea of boarding. Invicta smiled at the sight. The bodies on the station were tainted now, just like hers. She stunted their growth, their time now wasted.   She told her crew "No." Such a demand is the perfect test for one's crew. Loyalty is hard to come by. When the shuttle appeared to pick her up, she laughed.   She'll yell, of course, chastise them for disobeying her orders. They'll know she doesn't mean a word of it, for she'll be doing it with the biggest smile she can muster.    
    Caydie opened her eyes and promptly panicked the moment she realized she didn't know where she was. She shot up from the metal floor, whimpering.   Mute sat on the opposite side of the ship, and stood up when he heard her. "Caydie? It's okay."   Caydie took in her surroundings as her heart rate slowed. "A ship?"   "Yeah, an earth ship too."   "How?" She asked. She stared with wide eyes as Mute filled her in. Questions formed quicker than he could answer them. Why would an exile save her? Why stay behind? She chose to ask the most important question of all, "Where are we going?"   Mute smiled. "Home. I've heard stories, but never thought I'd actually go there. The ship is just flying itself. I've never seen an autopilot work like this."   "Earth tech is special," she said, crossing her legs and fidgeting with her fingers. "Thanks for carrying me. Sorry I got sick."   Mute shook his head, "Sorry? It wasn't your fault."   She nodded but didn't reply. It took several moments of silence for Mute to speak, "So how long does this take?"   "No idea. How long have we been traveling?"   "I… well I don't really know. A couple days at least." He said.   Their conversation ended when an electronic voice rang out from the on board computer, "prepare for warp drive activation."   "This thing has a warp drive?" Caydie said, standing and rushing to the cockpit.   Mute followed behind as he spoke, "It hasn't gone to warp at all since we left."   Caydie smiled and nodded. "Distance matters in a ship this small. It'd be a waste of power. We probably couldn't sustain warp for more than a few minutes before running out of air."   "What does that mean?" He asked.   Caydie jumped into the pilot's chair, scanning the screens as she strapped herself in. "It means we're minutes away from Safeharbor. Buckle up."   Mute sat in the chair beside her and strapped in as well. "I've never done this before."   "Don't worry. We'll be fine."   The ship's lights flashed, and darkness followed, the last thing they could see was the hull of the vessel warping. They heard the sound of metal bending as the hull fought against the strain.   After a few minutes, the ship stopped. The lights flickered back on and the cockpit display activated, revealing the view from outside the ship. Caydie could already feel the tears welling in her eyes.   Mute simply stared as the red planet grew with every passing second. His attention was drawn to a blinking yellow light on the comms panel. "Are we being hailed?"     Caydie caught the sight of a massive vessel hovering over where the three colonies should. A dreadnought. "That's new."   She pressed a button and a voice spoke on the intercom, "Unidentified vessel, this is admiral Thrace of The SVN Tudor. You're in occupied space. State your business or I'm gonna test out that really big gun over there."   Caydie beamed, her voice soft and shuddering as she gave a reply. "Miranda?"   Silence followed, only broken by Caydie's labored breathing. Finally, the voice answered in disbelief, "Caydie?"   "I didn't know you were made admiral. Congratulations."   Miranda's voice broke as she tried to form the words, "You died. How can you be here?"   "It's a long story. Can we land? I'll tell you all about it."   "Of course, we'll take over from here and guide you in. I'll make sure you get a warm welcome."     "You know her?" Mute asked.   Caydie wiped away tears as she replied, "She's the one who taught me how to fly."     They touched down and Caydie's eyes went wide when she saw the crowd gathered around the landing pad. Mute hugged the outside of the ship as she waved. She stepped out of the shuttle and into the blue sunlight. Autumn looked so different, but it was somehow still the same.   She caught the sight of her father and sobbed. "Daddy?" He stared in awe, unable to speak through tears of his own. Caydie held out her hand. "I'm home."   He wrapped his arms around her. He took in a sharp breath, the skin to skin contact hurting just as much as it brought him joy.   Caydie scanned the crowed as they cheered. She locked eyes with old friends and feared the worst when she realized some were missing.   Her smile faded when all fell silent. Everyone's attention shifted from Caydie as The Archivist emerged from the crowd. It was a long walk from the archive. He must have been running. She beamed at him as he approached. His hands shook and flailed, unsure of what to do, or where to be.   Caydie nodded and stepped forward, embracing his metal frame and squeezing him tight. "I missed you, Lorne." She whispered.   "Miss Caydie," he began, pulling away, so he could see her face. He gave her a soft pat on her shoulders. "Welcome home."

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Apr 6, 2021 05:30

Excellent.   I'm getting Destiny 2 'Darkness' vibes from these... well since they seem to have a connection to 'hell' I'm gonna call them Demons. And it does seem like I was right that the chlorine flood was a means for Invicta to stop a form of zombie apocalypse.   Did I interpret this right that the Demons are invisible? I'd say they had a purely gaseous form except for the fact that you describe thuds and clangs when they impact with physical objects.   The pearly gates hallucination raises a few questions. First off, if it's the sort of hallucination that shows you what you expect to see, does Invicta beleive in Heaven? if it's the sort of vision that shows something that's real, do the pearly gates really exist? Is it purely digital? The only other option I can think of is that the image is from the memories or imaginations of the Demons, designed to lull folks into false security. either way, it seems way more likely to me now that heaven is a real, physical place in this universe, which is an odd thought, since it kinda crosses the fantasy and sci-fi sides of my brain. I mean, I was thinking there would be a real place that folks would CALL heaven, but I was expecting more geometric metal walls and neon lines...

Apr 6, 2021 05:52 Private by R. Dylon Elder

Ooo ok so here we go. The entities are cloaked, one of the only forms of cloaking ever encountered. They will be the next article that begins season two. More will be revealed then. No zombies though. I played that card already. Similar, but... hmmm. Ok. Sneak peak. Three pieces of info for speculation.     1. They have been called demons by other species, but the exiles refer to them as sin eaters. Now if other species have a name for them... they cant be from earth.   2. The hallucinations are tied to one's past due to the chemical reaction in the brain but it doesnt have to be literal. That pearly Gate illusion can mean anything. She says not here for a reason, but it's not because she's physically been there.   3. Last but not least, the sin eaters are inspired by the necromongers from the chronicles of riddick.

Apr 6, 2021 05:56 by R. Dylon Elder

I will also add, theywill have scientific backing. No fantasy here.

Apr 6, 2021 08:22

Okay, so it's more like showing Invicta the pearly gates because she's not yet ready to die or something; she still has work to do, so the hallucinations show her what she fears most; that is, not being able to continue. or some such thing. Also I find it interesting that in the vision Invicta is wearing a white dress; I can hardly imagine her wearing something like that.   'sin eaters' is an interesting way to put it. It implies that they are, much like the outcasts, still doing what they believe is best for humanity, even if it pushes themselves beyond redemption. or, at least, at one point they did, and it turned them into something else.   I am not familiar with the chronicles of Riddick. gonna have to look that one up on google...   Interesting. I assume that you mean the sin eaters are on a quest to 'convert' all life to their cause in some way or another. can't just be killing everything like the Necromongers because Invicta would have just been helping them by flooding the station with poisonous gas. They have to be 'compatible' somehow, like Invicta wasn't; which seems like the only reason she survived.   Oh and also I'm glad the size of the archivist's ego didn't prevent him from squeezing out the door to meet caydie. (;   Anyway, this story seems to be going in an interesting direction; there are stories where humans are special, and those where they are simply another race in a huge galactic community. You seem to be slowly steering us in the direction of "what if humans were the chosen ones, and we just totally messed everything up by accident anyway?"

Apr 6, 2021 17:29 by R. Dylon Elder

YOURE SO CLOSE OMG. I may have revealed to much on the sin eaters... lol. A few minor tweaks and you'd be damn near spot on. Really think about their name. Why would the exiles call them that?     My absolute favorite part of this world is how different people interpret it. I want to make headcanon as credible as canon if that makes sense. I just love that and seek to give every interpretation on humanity and earth evidence that it could be true. Because so much is centered on bias and perspective, I really try to ponder as many different interpretations as I can, using the feedback I get to add to the ever growing list of theories. In many ways, you guys reading and filling the blanks with your interpretation helps steer the story of the world, so long as it fits the themes. I think this notion that they botched being the chosen one would be a wonderful thing to explore cause I dont think I've ever seen that.

Apr 6, 2021 09:31 by TC

Ooooh!!!! God thats interesting!! I've read the other comment and the fact that those who "broke into hell" are seemingly known by other species makes me wonder if those who broke into heaven did it with the guidance of extra-terrestrial beings?? (not gonna lie I really ma enjoying all of this biblical stuff, I've always been a huge fan of that!)   Also gosh Caydie made it home ;-; I'm so happy aaaaah, just. yeah. great stuff right there. oof. still so curious about gibraltar, and this last chapter raises so many questions- I'm dying to know more about this world (as always)!

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Apr 6, 2021 17:40 by R. Dylon Elder

Oooo yes indeed. The biblical side goes into the themes of hope and faith, which will be extremely important for the next season. This season was avery much about the world, the archivist, and Caydie. Season two is all about mouse and the wayfarers. Caydie's home, and its unlikely she's in a hurry to leave anytime soon after all.   Thanks so much! I love how everyone seems to enjoy this world and how literally everyone reading it focuses on different elements of the plot and interprets the world differently. Thanks for sticking with it thus far!

Apr 6, 2021 18:13 by Time Bender

A happy ending to the season finale! This is so cool. Great job, as always! I don't even know where to start, except to say that this was definitely worth the wait. I'm blown away at how fast you work, and I'm so happy I stumbled across your worlds!

Apr 6, 2021 19:17 by R. Dylon Elder

I'm glad it was worth the wait! Thanks so much for the kind words. On the speed, that kind of goes back into the "state of mind" writer I am. It takes ages for me to work on somthing that doesnt feel ready. Now, if I'm ready to write it and have a clear picture of what's going on, I can churn out words like crazy. Not always a good thing lol it sucks being at the mercy of inspiration but work does get done quicker. XD ima take a break this week and actually read through a bunch of articles. Yours are on the lost for sure and I'm eager to continue reading the story! Till next time and again thanks so much!

Apr 7, 2021 15:27

Just an all-around amazing first season with a brilliantly satisfying (and yet enticing!) finale. I loved reading the comments as well, with speculations on the fate of Earth. I'm super excited to read about Mouse and the Wayfarers next season! Enjoy a well-deserved break and know we'll be waiting here to pick up again when you are ready.

Apr 23, 2021 13:03 by Wendy Vlemings (Rynn19)

See, you did it again! *wipes away tears* This has been such a wonderful experience, reading through it all from beginning to end. I'm so glad that Caydie made it home, and Mute as well. I can't imagine what it must be like to be the only human on a space station. I remain so very intrigued by what "We broke into Heaven" means or refers to. Of course now these new creatures and what "They broke into Hell" means. Are these two connected? I have so many thoughts.

Author of Ealdwyll, a fantasy world full of mystery.
Apr 23, 2021 20:27 by R. Dylon Elder

I'm so glad you enjoyed it! The kind words and praise are all so very appreciated. I don't think there are enough words to express how appreciative I am. Thanks so much. I'm beyond happy that it worked out and I'm so excited for season two and the podcast and everything.   I wanna reply here since I didnt want to just throw a bunch of comments and fill your notifs.   I can say for sure I want to put a book out. It will likely encompass seasons 1 and 2 with some art and more. We shall see when the time comes. It is quite an emotional story and I'm glad it brought up those emotions and that others can feel as much as they understand it. Ooof. This world is special for me and I'm beyond happy it's gotten the attention it has. Just thank you and I hope it continues to be as good as the first season has.

Apr 24, 2021 04:54 by Wendy Vlemings (Rynn19)

You are welcome. I am also very excited about season two and the podcast. Can't wait.

Author of Ealdwyll, a fantasy world full of mystery.
May 9, 2021 00:14 by Grace Gittel Lewis

Dang A Void Between's got it's own doom doritos huh?   And a welcome return! This was a great season, glad I was around for the ride!

May 9, 2021 00:47 by R. Dylon Elder

Ehhh... more like jagged doom twinkies but thanks for pointing that out cause I kinda missed describing the actual shape XD   I'm glad you enjoyed it and stuck with it, my friend!

May 9, 2021 01:11 by Grace Gittel Lewis

Haha, I couldn't help but think to the doom doritos first from that description!

Jul 14, 2021 04:19 by Jacob Billings

Whoop. Break again. I guess I didn't manage to get through "Home" before I ran out of time. Oh well. Here goes nothing!

The station was filled with green gas by now

There are two things I'm going to mention, one of which doesn't particuarly matter and is regarding style. The first is that the "by now" is unnecesary as the "filled with green gas" indicates a completed action. If you want to indicate a recent finish, a better way of phrasing would be something more akin to "the hall was brimmed with green gas, stirring and settling like the twisted tentacles of a creature found in the deep thralls of space." The key indicator in that sentence is "settling," allowing the reader to identify that the gas had recently filled the space. Anyway, that example also hits on my other point: description, figurative language, and prose. This is something I've mentioned before, but you prose is very straightforward. Which is both good and bad. You offer as little detail as possible, which can be most effective in horror/horrific settings as it leave lots to the imagination. However, when it comes to the rest of prose, it's good to at least try and introduce some level of description. Even if it's super basic and consists of minor alterations to use stronger adjectives or the occasional simile or metaphor, it can greatly boost engagement. Presently, you're relying heavily on your strong suites of dialogue and character, which are important to interest, however, your prose slightly disrupts that. Not enough that you need to change it, I would just suggest considering what style of prose you want. If you like the way you're writing, that's great. There's an audience for that. I personally prefer stronger description, however, the rest of your writing is good enough it's only a slight hinderance for me. Anyway, this point is really about consideration of style, so I would suggest playing around with it a bit to see if there's a different style you feel enhances the story or if you prefer the style you've presently got. Again, that's not to say it's bad by any stretch of the imagination so much as to say that it's simple and, in some cases, adding a bit more complexity can spice up the reader experience.  
the canisters she used for cover.

Well. This comment might be a touch off as I can't always remember how passivity plays into the language, however, I would say that "used for cover" is rather passive. When writing action-based scenes in fiction writing, it's important that you use active language. In this case, saying "the canisters she had ducked behind" is slightly more active, employing a use of active past tense. Your phrasing is a bit more passive, turning the "she used for cover" into an adjective instead of an action. (Don't try Googling any of the words I used as I believe actual use of passive/active language is slightly different, specifically pertaining to whether the subject is doing something to an object or a subject is having something done to it by the object of the sentence; I think this kind of applies as it's not her using the canisters for cover, as would be active, but you're having the canisters be used for cover. It's a bit of a grey area for me.)  
The lights of the station dimmed, and flickered.[quote]
Hmm. If it's not clear yet, when I make a comment I run off the assumption that it's not a typo. So if things like what I'm about to say are just typos, you can ignore it. If not, I'm leaving the comment to highlight how the wickedness of English grammar fuctions. In this case, you don't need the comma before "and." While "and" can function as a coordinating conjunction, that is only necesary in the case of two independent clauses. (ex. has a subject, verb, and, potentially, an object). "flickered" is simply a secondary action. It doesn't even count as a dependent clause as it's just the verb. Technically, you make it out to be the second and terminating item of a list. With lists, commas are only ever needed when you have three or more items (and I'm preferencial to the oxford comma, as displayed in my ex. list.)   [quote]she saw it. It was faint, something barely noticeable, even to her trained eyes. She saw movement in the gas. What once flowed with perfect unpredictable motion, now gently danced to a different tune.
I'm only really pointing out the consecutive use of the word "it" here, but I decided to highlight the whole passage... for.... some reason? Anyway, I would rephrase so you use the implied subject to and a sense of eerie-ness through the weird language: "she saw it. Faint. Barely noticable, even to her trained eyes. The movement in the gas. Once flowing with unsynchronized, unpredictable, and natural movements, it now gently danced to the tune of a puppet pulled along a sinking string." (Ignore the random flair I added at the end. It was trying something for fun. It's not relevant). The significant aspect of the language I used was brevity and broken English. When intentional, it can give either empasis. In this case, we're highlighting the non-human and somewhat strange actions with equally odd grammar. I basically toss all my normal rules out the window and intentionally break them to create a strong feeling. (It think. I also barely know what I'm doing, but I believe the example passage should highlight a stronger feeling of eerieness???? Also, there are a few problems in my example, namely the line "The movement in the gas" as it breaks pattern, however, I wanted to leave the original language relatively unchanged. And I was too lazy to rewrite more than that)  
She heard the round connect, heard something drop to the floor, and then watched for the next sign of motion.

So. You start a bit of repetition/parallelism here and then break it. "She heard...heard...then" I would see if you can either use another "heard" phrase or can separate the "and then" into a new sentence. This comes back to the intentional breaking of English grammar. Technically, you need something stronger than a comma to not create a comma splice, however, if it's intentional you could get away with "She heard the round connect, heard something drop to the floor. Then....
nothing. Motionlessness hung in the air, a grasping power waiting and watching for the slightest sign of life."  
Another came, then another. She fired, but there were too many to shoot in such a short amount of time. She heard a whisper, a hiss in her ear that spoke, yet said nothing.

Two things here, in different parts of the sentence. I could break this into two comments, but I'm not I guess. Anyway, the first thing is that you could create stronger emphasis with full stops: "Another came. Then another." Additionally, the other aspect is repetition of opening words to sentences. You do this quite a bit. "She fired... She heard" See if you can vary the sentence complexity a bit and introduce more phrases to break up the language as the repetition unwittlingly draws the reader's attention as they've just read a sentence of parallel opening.
This happens a few more times that I'm not going to specifically point out as they're not super relevant, but it's a recurring aspect of your writing.   Not a grammar comment. But excuse me. Did you just kill Invicta. Wow. That was... unexpectedly expected. It fits as a character decision, the sterotype of the mean older mentor being the one to die and save the protagonist, but I want ANSWERS. Anyway, interesting. And, if that's not what happened, what the actual heck did? You used the name Gibraltar, which I've clearly forgotten, and then it kind of became unclear who the "she" was. I assumed it to be Invicta and ignored the random "Gibraltar" line, but I'm probably just blanking.  
She shot up from the metal floor, whimpering.

This is a bit odd... Whimpering is a really odd choice of action. Panting, hyperventalating, or shaking might be better (I had a better one, but I'm blanking on interesting verbs at the moment.) Anyway, is whimpering really the best action. I would think of a scared, defenseless creature more than a scared adult?  
Mute sat on the opposite side of the ship, and stood up when he heard her. "Caydie? It's okay."

An unusual problem for you. There's no dialogue tag and, thus, you don't really give an indication of intention. I can infer that it'd be comforting, but it reads as semi-monotonous. You should try using a broken dialogue: "Caydie?" Mute asked in shock, kneeling down next to her and offering comfort. "It's okay. It's just me." Not fully sure though. Additional note about specificity. I took "shot up" to mean into a sitting position. That'd be quicker and more vulnerable, lending itself to backing into a corner where one could better see everything. If you intended shot straight to standing, you should specify by saying "shot to her feet" instead "shot up from the metal floor."  
A couple days at least." He said.

Just so you don't forget, I'm going to restate a common comment. A) The "he" shouldn't be capitalized. Period. There is no questioning that. B) You don't need a dialogue tag, much less one so simple that doesn't add any kind of action or verbal intonation. We already know who is engaged in the conversation and we know who would be responding. An unnecesary line (the dialogue tag)  
prepare for warp drive activation.

The opposite problem to the last. Unless it's a broken dialogue (ex: "Where the wind blows," she began, "the sun sets." | This is just random, but the idea is a complete thought broken in half by a dialogue tag), dialogue always picks up a new sentence and therefore begins capitalized.  
"I've never done this before."

Again, there's no dialogue tag attached to this line so we don't know if he's giddy or nervous. Then, while Caydie's line about nervousness could be read as inferntial material, she could have misunderstood. I would see about using a dialogue tag here in place of the one two comments up.  
"I missed you, Lorne." She whispered.

I'm going to point it out once more to drive my point home. Even stylized, dialogue tags should ONLY be capitalized when the word would be capitalized in the middle of a sentence because, by all technicallities, a dialogue tag is in the middle of a sentence.
What a great end to the season. I rather enjoy the prose bits as they offer a lot to dig into as far as grammar goes as creative writing is far harder to learn than formal writing. This was a rather long comment and I definitely stopped hitting on smaller points as I read, so that's why there's a heavy concentration of comments toward the top that thins out as we go. That, and I was engaged in read and found scrolling to comment a wee bit distracting from that...   Anyway, great work and I hope that the rather long comment helps!

Jul 14, 2021 04:20 by Jacob Billings

Dang. I missed another slash in the [quote]s. It's pretty easy to spot, so I'll just ignore it.

Jul 14, 2021 05:42 by R. Dylon Elder

Oooo so I forgot to edit this one for sure. That's why certain dialogue tags are missing. Since your comments I've noticed I overcompensate them when editing. It's weird to notice errors as you make them.   The capitalized pronouns are irritating me. They never get highlighted by my grammar checker and my brain just glosses over them everytime I look. Oof I'll fix those. Thanks for pointing them out too. My phone automatically caps them.   This is an excellent comment and i will definitely apply these bits of advice, especially the note on description. While going through this season I noticed that I dont give a single character description to half the characters involved. Caydie had some, invicta has some. The world is very poorly depicted. It's something I'm trying to fix while working in season two which, for whatever reason feels less rushed. I'm glad it was still a good end to the season. That was my biggest concern. It's a such a small thing to end a story on in the grand scheme of things.   I havnt forgotten the article either. I will be delving into that beast soon. Havnt had much time this past week. Writing is pretty much all I have time to do XD soom though, I assure you. Thanks so much, as always!

Aug 19, 2021 20:28

Finally made time to go through the world and story, and my only regret is that I didn't make it sooner. To make it up I was obsessed with The Void Between for the past days, reading it whenever I could.   The quotes and the world depicted were so good and well thought, from the genetic enhancement of humanity to the emphasis on the relativity of time. I can't say if I'm more involved with the Wayfarers or Caydie's story, but I was afraid for their safety when they entered the Pale Horse lab as much as I was happy that Caydie was alive and made it to SafeHarbor. Small typos here and there but nothing too troublesome.   I've rarely been hooked this much by a story and I can't wait to know more, heading straight to season 2!

Hoo~ Hoo
Aug 19, 2021 21:24 by R. Dylon Elder

OMG thanks so much for the kind words man, You've been binging and I couldn't be happier for it. I appreciate it so much and i hope you continue to enjoy it!

May 3, 2022 23:18 by Lilliana Casper

This was spectacular. A truly amazing end to the season. I cannot wait to read more soon.   Invicta's vision is particularly interesting to me. I wonder why she was so upset to see that specific place. The enemies are mysterious and creepy and I really want to know more about them. Did she kill the people on the station, or just turn them into something similar to her?   Caydie's home! I'm so happy for her and her friends. Her realizing some of them might not still be alive was heartbreaking and so was the part about her father hugging her even though the contact hurts. The reunion with the Archivist was sweet and I could really tell how hesitant he was.   I'm probably going to wait a little while before beginning season 2, just to get ready for it. I can't wait, I'm sure it will be just as good as this. Good luck with all your current projects!

Lilliana Casper   I don't comment much, but I love reading your articles! Please check out my worlds, Jerde and Tread of Darkness.
May 3, 2022 23:38 by R. Dylon Elder

My friend, I want to thank you so much for all the love you've given while reading. It made my day to see it and rest assured, once life gets a little more calm, I'll return it in kind. It's no rush at all to continue. It's already daunting as it is. Just thanks so much!

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