The Bone Snake of Mistfall Valley
The story of the bone snake of Mistfall Valley is about a large serpent, with rattling bones for a body, that lives in a den deep within the misty valley in the Frost Mountains. Hundreds of tales and folklore have been told, describing a bloodthirsty creature who kills whoever makes their way within the valley. The most frightening thing about the story is the bones and skeletal remains that can be found around the mist on the mountainsides, believed to be the unfortunate travellers who lost their lives to this monstrous creature.
Summary
The Bone Serpent has not actually been seen by anybody alive today. Many believe it waits for things to fall in and eats it.
Over 7 thousand years ago, the slow moving rock golems in the peaks of the Frost Mountain Range started describing a terrifying snake creature within Mistfall Valley, that was over a hundred feet long, glaring red eyes, a terrifying stare, and its entire body being a skeletal carcass that has rotted over a thousand years. Throughout history many different civilisations that live in these mountains have depicted a snake made of bones in various ways, the oldest Kozkonyonyaosi tribe drew the snake with large spines and a sail, the Cave Rocklins that live in Blue Mountain describe it with 6 yellow eyes and small legs.
Over 7 thousand years ago, the slow moving rock golems in the peaks of the Frost Mountain Range started describing a terrifying snake creature within Mistfall Valley, that was over a hundred feet long, glaring red eyes, a terrifying stare, and its entire body being a skeletal carcass that has rotted over a thousand years. Throughout history many different civilisations that live in these mountains have depicted a snake made of bones in various ways, the oldest Kozkonyonyaosi tribe drew the snake with large spines and a sail, the Cave Rocklins that live in Blue Mountain describe it with 6 yellow eyes and small legs.
Spread
The Bone Snake is one of the lesser known Kaltian myths in the world, however very famous in the Frost Mountain Range due to the Mistfall Valley being so large and mysterious.
Cultural Reception
Every single culture, ethnicity and species that describes this creature within their history all fear this being, and some have built sacrificial statues where they sacrifice ones that have passed, burying them underneath the statue in large holes to please the snake and hope that it does not attack their villages.
In Art
In the Hall of Majesties in Horruin, a tapestry is hung down the large main corridor, with a giant picture of the bone snake woven into it. It sits alongside many other mythical creatures in Kaltian lore, such as the Bunbunyi and the Frost Walker.
Date of First Recording
-5000 (Rock Golems wrote stories of them on stone tablets)
This is a really cool creature, and I love how you have multiple different depictions of it from various people. You've got a lot of good stuff in this article, but it's undermined by the way that you've organized the information. Under the heading "Summary" you talk about cultural depictions of the bone snake, why isn't that under each respective cultures part of "How do other cultures view it?" Why is the first sentence of your summary that noone alive today has seen it? I'd recommend moving the paragraph under Cultural Reception to your introduction. It tells you a lot about what this Bone Snake means to the people, and why we should care about it. Your current introduction needs an edit too, it's kind of confusing that you start out by saying "the story" implying there's only one, and then immediately follow it up with a sentence about how there's hundreds of tales. I noticed these two aren't the only sentences that feel like rewrites of the sentence before it. Where the information is more or less repeated, but slightly different. This also happens under Kozkonyonyaosi: The Kozkonyonyaosi started writing stories about their travels, and are now stored in libraries for others to read. People that go on explorations near Mistfall Valley often end up writing about it, and others are always keen to read these stories, to gather more information on this mystery. These two sentences are just too similar to be right after eachother. The first beat is about how travellers write stories about their travels, and the second is that others want to read them. I'd also recommend taking a second pass on your grammar. There's a couple times where the tense shifts in the middle of a sentence, and incorrect pronouns. I think with some edits, this article will be really awesome!