This page is a demonstration and test of a project I have in mind. It is also my take on the Colony Challenge. Constructive feedback and suggestions would be appreciated. The feedback I would like is any spelling or grammar mistakes I have made. Also some comments and, perhaps, any improvements in my style of writing. For example, with the nature of the 2nd Person Perspective, I am aware one could say 'you' a lot; I would like some comments on this too, whether if it is something I need not worry about or even if you have some tips to share would be nice. I see myself as a beginner, even now after so many articles. The interactive fiction and 2nd person perspective are very new to me, but it is something I thoroughly enjoy and love. Immersion is key for me and is something I would love to improve on. So I would love comments, feedback, suggestions and tips on how I could improve on this too. I would also love feedback on the map. I've experimented to make it into a point and click version of this article. I would love feedback on the layout, functionality and any ideas to help improve it; also any other thoughts you may have. Thank you
Really interesting concept and idea! I like the air of mystery and the descriptions of the locations. I wonder what a Hollowed Hunter and Hollowed beasts are (even if I have a few guesses, which might be wrong) as they sound interesting (and dangerous). I also wonder how the Character got the Oculus in his/her possession as it indeed seem very powerful, but that might be explained later or something. ^-^
"If you look upon the stars, know that you look upon a light of the past."
Of course, there will be a ton which will be explained later on in other articles/pages/stories. This article isn't even finished yet, but I do appreciate the comment and compliments, so thank you very much. How the character got the Oculus? That's a really good question, one which I don't know the answer to yet. It is indeed powerful, hence it is also very rare too, though the mechanics of it needs working on too. Anyways I'll stop there before I ramble out spoilers :D Thanks for the like and comment, Leno!