The Prestige
Bending the rules...
What is The Prestige?
The downside is lack of control. A practitioner can't always choose how the energy will react when it manifests. Most don't even try to manifest it. Manifested energy is unstable and has a tendency to backfire. The physical and the metaphysical are not meant to mix, and the results can be lethal.
The most common use of The Prestige comes in the form of light manipulations of the physical reality. Practitioners do not want to break the rules, they wish to bend them. They can't manifest fire from thin air, at least not with any measure of safety. Instead they may use a lighter to produce the fire, and The Prestige to pull it, manipulate it, and make it grow.
Bending Physics
You can't create water from nothing, but there is usually more than enough moisture in the air. Condensing it is easy enough, you're following the rules. You can shape and move the water, using trace amounts of the metaphysical energy that moves through your body to lift it into the air and shape it into a ball.
This may seem like a minor inconvenience. Control is better than nothing, but the amount of focus and out of the box thinking required to make such talents useful is not something many are capable of. This is especially true when facing the dangerous world of The Web.
Of Sound Mind and Body
To cast even the most simple arcane effects, one has to go through a huge list of problems that need to be solved before it can be done safely. In order to live out the fantasy of throwing a fireball at an enemy, one must first figure out where the fire is coming from due to the fact that you cannot simply create it out of thin air. This can be as simple as carrying a matchbook with you or lighter. Next, you must figure out how to shape the fire into the form of a ball. This is also pretty simple, as the practitioner will be able to use the energy within their own body to be able to reach out and control it as if using telekinesis. Then the complications will start to appear.
Have you determined how to prevent the ball of flame from burning you when you hold it in the palm of your hand to throw it? Have you considered what you're going to do when you have thrown it and find you threw all the fire you had at your disposal? Have you considered controlling the fire so that it does not spread to the surrounding environment or hurt someone you did not intend to hurt? Will the ball of flame explode or will it coat your enemy like a liquid? Most importantly, have you considered other options for potential attacks if fire proves ineffective, and if so, have you gone through the exact same process of solving the problems that these questions address for that attack as well?
Tools Of The trade
Focus: A focus is an item that takes a bulk of the stress The Prestige produces, so the faster won't have to. There is no standard as to what a catalyst can be, but the faster must understand it perfectly. They must know the measurements, weight, composition, and nature of the item as well as how they intend their abilities to flow from them. Examples include spellbooks, jewelry, or weapons. Morrigan, who is blind, uses a cane while her mentor used a wedding ring. The spell cast will flow from the focus like a wand or staff of traditional fantasy.
Genres: Arcane genres focus on the theory of different styles used by those who practice The Prestige. There are ancient texts from The Antediluvian Age that note miraculous power. These texts are still relevant, even if magic doesn't exist anymore. Practitioners take these texts and modernize them.
Ritual: Rituals are prepared casts that usually require little effort on the part of the practitioner. A ritual takes advantage of loopholes found in the rules of reality. By gathering components at certain times or in certain conditions, they can achieve arcane effects. There is little reason for why these specific variables cause the effect. There are many who dedicate their time studying rituals and why they work, as well as discovering new rituals that can be performed.
Jacob Billings
Ooh. A lovely magic system you've got.
From the phrasing of the sentence, it looks like there should be a comma between "and" and "for". It looks like you have a typo. There is no reason to have a period after "reaction". You mention "the rite" and "practitioner" as terms. However, you don't seem to specify what they mean, which could be a downfall of the opener. Perhaps reworking this sentence to flow better would work. The entire paragraph seems to a colitation of sentences without transtitions. "There are maybe less than a few thousand people in the world who are capable of using The Prestige, of which, the Oxford Cabal boasts less than one hundred members." This is the first time that you mention it as being a material. While it is slightly alluded to in the reactions, you make it sounds more like a meta-physical entity than a physical material. This further leaves me lost. I may have missed something, but is this attempting to convey that the Prestige can be summoned as energy and effects OR a physical material? Unless I missed something big, this may need more clarification. The first sentence in the excerpt is a little short. It seems out of place and may, like before, be better suited as a single entity to conjoin the similar ideas. This sentence is a little confusing. It's not super clear on what tragic situation is happening when, where, and why. You should probably rework the wording there to a more logical sentence. At seeing that "The Rite" is a section that comes later in the article, you should probably add an [noparse][/nosparse] to it so you can url link it from the original mention.When entering the ending section(starting at "The Rite"), I was suddenly pulled out of the world. Is this section meant to be in the second person? It seems really out of place unless this is meant to be an excerpt from a book on the studies of the Prestige and how to use it.
Typo here: "wasg" instead of "wash".
However, the only thing I did pick up on is that you are cementing the Prestige as the building blocks of existence, something that's really only lightly hinted at before. Mentioning in a bit stronger of a tone how the Prestige is the basis of all existence, in the beginning, would aid your article.
Typo again; "Immaculate" doesn't need to be capitalized.
In the "Going Loud" section, I suggest that you work on the ending a bit more. This is the last line you leave the reader with, but you simply mention that this power can have a devastating effect on reality. Perhaps a small mention of what has happened before or something to conclude the article on a different note.
Overall, a very interesting Magic System that you could use to create a variety of interesting circumstances.
Jacob Billings
[h3|anchor][/nosparse] to it so you can url link it from the original mention.[/h3] That's a typo. Meant to be "[noparse][h3|anchor] to it so you can url link it from the original mention.
Jacob Billings
Still a typo. Wow. But you should get the point from it, as it does show what I meant to type, albeit incorrectly.
R. Dylon Elder
Absolutely man. thanks so much. I'll prolly start doin that cause sidevars are usually towards the end on mobile and most wait till the end to read it. Great advice there. Awesome critique and I'll get to work on it soon! Do send one of yours my way if you have it. Good crits should never go unrewarded!