This painting is an interesting piece of
Silver Shore Island's history. It shows
The Five Mages in their glory days. This small friend group inside rebellion group
Moonstalkers would become famous in its time, but sadly, would disband before they would free Island, making their win bittersweet.
High elf druid in the painting,
Ninthalor "Buck" Elawynn had escaped
Empire of Islenor, and wasn't happy when Empire claimed Silver Shore to itself.
Buck jumped from rebellion group to another and through that process met
Stoneskulls, offering his knowledge of Empire. There he befriended
Gilbert Nightingale, black-haired gnome bard in the painting, and the painter of the art piece,
Loke Softstrider.
It was Gilbert and Buck that brought the group together, Buck as the heart and Gilbert as a conscience for the crew. Buck would become one of the most influential captains in
Moonstalkers, while Gilbert and Loke would keep eye on things in Stoneskull court.
Gilbert recruited to the group the dwarven lady,
Myrvina Craghammer. Myrvina was like force nature, the hammer of justice that would go through stone if needed to. She brought strength and muscle to the group. She two would become important officer for
Moonstalkers rebellion force.
Buck, on another hand, spotted commotion in one of the camps of rebellion: young drow of noble blood and scales of the dragon to proof his lineage had come to give his sword to the cause. Where others were intimidated by
Driz'Meratar Shadowblade, Buck saw something more in the boy. He saw the troubled soul, forced to become something he was not and Driz'Mer's calculative character yet good heart. Buck decide to claim the boy under his wing. First awkward rivalry turned to friendship, then unexpected brotherhood between two very different elves. Buck found Driz'Mer like a little brother while Driz'Mer got in him the father figure he was lacking. Driz'Mer would become the spymaster of
Moonstalkers and would be the groups calculative cunning and sly diplomat.
Last, there was young
Gnut Weaseltail, talented young wizard, that was full of new and creative ideas. He would become best friend with Driz'Mer, and his wild ideas tempered by his friends turned to glorious plans, later making him the leader of the
Moonstalkers.
The group stayed together thick and thin until a disaster happened. Buck was recognized while saving refugees looking for shelter from
Empire of Islenor and wanted posters with his face were suddenly everywhere. Buck, despite all the warnings, refused to keep a low profile, and accidentally gave out one the hiding places of the rebellion, by not watching if he was seen by Empire guards. This devastated Buck, but instead of hiding and waiting dust settles, he wanted to charge and avenge fallen rebels, and others knew something had to be done but they couldn't decide on what.
So Driz'Mer, being the one who always tries to make hard decisions when others couldn't, would calculate that he should act without everyone's agreement, only telling his plan to Gnut. He used his connections to get a ship that was going to sail far from the Island, beyond the Mirror's Deep and captured his friend Buck in middle of the night. He dragged him to the ship and told sailors to cuff him, and not let him free before they were across the sea. And for Buck, he told, that he wasn't welcome back to next 20 years until Island was there or the rebellion was defeated by Empire, whichever came first. Buck was furious, but Driz'Mer stood his ground and sent his friend off, hopefully to safety, from further dangering all they were fighting for.
Gnut would stay by Driz'Mer's side, but others were horrified. Gilbert and Loke would forgive and understand but were upset that the decision had been made without anyone else's input. Myrvina was furious, would call Driz'Mer traitor and would never forgive him. Driz'Mer would take it all quietly, looking emotionless, but everyone who knew him to know, he never forgave himself and was as heartbroken than the rest.
The rebellion would get their chance to save their island when during
War of Scale and Arrow,
Moonstalkers would join Dragonborn in
invasion in Moon Terrace. But
The Five Mages were never the same.
Loke was permanently injured in the last push for freedom and would remain sick rest of his days. Those years he put in use by painting all he and his friends had experienced. This painting was his gift for
Gnut Weaseltail, as they were reminiscing the past, pondering if Buck was still somewhere out there.
Okay, I have to say that for something without images, you truly describe the image quite well. Although on the other hand, I feel this is a bit difficult to really read. The big problem is that you seem to forget a lot of articles (the, a, an, etc), which makes it harder to read. Additionally, some of the sentences are bloated with exposition that could be easily moved into tooltips or excerpts for article links. It feels like some sentences are either going on too long or trimmed short of a few too many words. Secondly, article links, add them. You can dump additional info in their names, organisations and more. It can clean up a lot of exposition. Thirdly, some quotes of the characters could be handy: Perhaps also start with each described character's name. Finally, just a grammar check. There are some grammatical and spelling errors here and there. TL;DR, check the grammar, add article links, cut some of the exposition down and perhaps add a few quotes of the characters. Hopefully this critique did help a bit, even if it seemed a bit surface-level.
Thank you! x3 I'll be cleaning it up! Yeah, articles.... ^^; I got to look at those, I speak language without them, so it makes it easy to forget them but yeah, that can be tricky for the reader. ^^' But yes, Quotes! I didn't think of that, they could work on this too! Thanks! And no worries, I got plenty of things to work with from this! Thank you Endrise for taking the time to look at this! x3
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