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Psychological Exploration of Edelmiro Deleon

A psychological assessment on Edelmiro Brian Deleon written by his previous therapist. After a year, Brian discontinued therapy and has shown no interest in returning.  
"I'm sorry you're so damn fragile. I'm sorry everything I say somehow hurts your feelings. I feel like I can't talk to you about anything! You get upset all the time. You used to be so cool. Now you're always mad at me." The words escape Brian's throat like moths fleeing a flame. They bounce around the office before settling at the rims and everyone waits for something.

May's body suddenly jerks to attention, the edges of her mouth yanking back in a feral snarl. "Maybe you should try a little harder, bitch."


After continued efforts from his younger stepsister in achieving closure from her abuse, Brian was convinced to attempt therapy with the hope of reaching the same outcome. Despite May and Anthony encouraging further sessions, Brian eventually decided to stop attending therapy after realizing the work it required. This would be the first and last attempt Brian took in regaining control over his behavior.   With age, Brian has become increasingly venomous on the topic of therapy and psychological help. Despite the progress he once admired in May, he now envies her achievements and is offended her capabilities outshine his own. While his therapist tried fervently to keep in contact with him, Brian had no longlasting interest in recovery to begin with and it is unknown whether or not this will change.  
I will be either updating this article or archiving it soon in response to a shift in setting.
Journal, Medical

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Elias Redclaw
22 May, 2019 17:42

Wow, for a short entry, i really love this article! The document really does feel like a scientific journal and medical journal to me. I do want to know though, what was its legacy? How accessible is the document? Is it legal or publicly avialible? I am sorry if this comment was bad but still, i do hope you found it at least remotely good. Congratulations and keep up the great work!

23 May, 2019 07:43

Hey, thanks so much! It's a medical document, so it's under HIPAA. I figured I wouldn't bother explaining since most medical documents are typically under lock and key, but I may add it in later if it bugs me enough. You put time into commenting and I appreciate the feedback! No need to apologize. :)

22 May, 2019 22:06

Super dark, in a personal way, really well done!   I felt almost guilty reading this. Like I accidentally found a doctors notes, or some very very personal files, and decided to read them over. The article does a great job of really imparting that feeling. I'd love to know a little bit more about Brian, before jumping into the doctors notes regarding his therapy -- make the therapy notes even more impactful!

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23 May, 2019 07:48

Aw, thank you so much! I was hoping it would be realistic enough to sound miserably private, haha. As for Brian, I was wondering if I should add more info and I'll give that a bit more thought. His bio is pretty fleshed for now and offers enough backstory to give some firm groundwork, but I appreciate you alerting me to feeling a disconnect with his character!   Will absolutely try to work on expanding the therapy notes and giving more backstory prior to the sessions! :") Thanks again so much!

25 May, 2019 12:53

I have to say, your writing is amazing!
Really love the unusual take on the "exploration" part of the challenge.
Keep up the great work!

27 May, 2019 11:28

This was a great article! The behaviors described here feel very real, and the style of the document really makes it feel like you'd find this when stumbling on a therapist's notes.   Even though the document is a medical journal and thus neutral, the dark patterns of behavior that are described make the whole description very dramatic.   Thank you for this article!

With love,   Pouaseuille.