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could i suggest some changes to the Oikos description
paragraph one line one should probably be the possessive of it, its
line four of the same paragraph mortal should not be possesive
throught the text there is used as a possesive for they and should be replaced with their
Paragraph 2 has a bit of a run on sentence. I would suggest breaking it up
also in the final line heroes does not need to be possessive
I just took a look at it and I see what you mean. I did some more changes to make it read a bit better (in my opinion) but not sure if I made the possessiveness of the last "heroes" go down a notch
hey thanks. I think my suggestions were really vague.
so in line one "seen it self torn apart" should be "seen its self torn apart"
line 3 Oikos to Oiko's and year to years.
paragraph 2 line 1 there to their
line 4 self to selves
Hope that helps
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